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    Bane (story) - Chapter 1 done

    So yeah, got chapter 1 finished. I'll tell you now, though, this chapter doesn't really explain any main parts of the storyline, just setting everything up. So, anyway, here you go:

    Chapter 1 - Hematophobia

    As Zeke stepped off the plane, his breath caught in his throat. God, this place is huge, he thought. The small city of Sherrill was nothing compared to New York City. The buildings were colossal and seemed to shoot endlessly into the sky. Everything was artificial and gray and black, unlike his old neighborhood, where there were woods and tons of wildlife, especially deer.

    Someone getting off the plane behind him ran into him, sending him sprawling to the ground. He got up, dusted himself off, and cursed at the man under his breath,

    “Zeke! Hurry up, son!” Ethelred, his father, called.

    “Yeah, whatever,” he said as he ran to catch up.

    The inside of the airport was packed full of people. Zeke weaved his way through the crowd, then got in the taxi that was waiting for him and his father. The vehicle cranked into life with a jolt, then jerked forward a few times, and finally sped off down the road.

    The ride to his new house was long and boring. He spent most of the time staring out the window, thinking about how much it was going to suck having to switch schools for the second time this year. His dad had told him that this would be the last time they moved, but he scarcely believed him.

    When they arrived, his mother, Isis, and his younger brother, Quincey, were already there.

    “Happy 16th birthday, Zeke!” they said in unison when he walked through the front door.

    “Right, happy,” he muttered. The only thing was good about moving was that his best friend Ray Winters was also moving, seeing as their fathers had the same job, so they were both forced to move here.

    “Go see your new room,” his mother urged him.

    He walked upstairs, and opened the first door on the left. Master bedroom. He continued to open doors until he found the one with all his belongings in it. He actually kind of liked his new room. It was definitely bigger than his old one.

    He sat down on the recliner chair in the corner, grabbed a magazine off the table next to him, and began to read.

    “Dinner time!” his mom called from the kitchen. He sluggishly walked down the stairs into the dining room.

    He toyed with his food with a fork all through dinner without uttering a word.

    “Is everything alright?” his father asked in concern.

    “Yeah, I’m just not hungry.” With that, he got up, went to his room, and fell asleep in the chair.

    ...

    He awoke the next morning feeling very rested. Despite that, he felt almost sick when he remembered that he would be starting school again so early after moving. He got dressed and went downstairs to eat breakfast.

    The drive to school was almost the same as the one to his new home, except not as long. On arrival, Zeke got his backpack and trudged through the double doors at the front of the school.

    He shyly walked over to the homeroom class lists, and found that he would be in Mr. Davis’s homeroom class. It was the third door to the right on the ninth grade hallway. On his way, he dropped his bag and went into the bathroom.

    The first thing he saw on entrance was a boy that looked his age bending over the sink, gushing blood. Zeke’s heart banged against his ribcage like a hammer, and he couldn’t see straight. He instantly began to feel lightheaded. His horrible fear of blood was kicking in, and he was about to fall out. Losing his balance, he fell to the ground and smacked his head into the tiled floor, knocking him out cold….
    Mo-fuggah

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    Re: Bane (story) - Chapter 1 done

    oh no poor zeke!!! i love the story so far ^^ good job
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    Re: Bane (story) - Chapter 1 done

    Quote Originally Posted by ~*kaia*~
    oh no poor zeke!!! i love the story so far ^^ good job
    thanks, and it'll get better, too
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