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    Poems >_>

    damn, i saw a poem on droidz and decided to try myself. I'll update soon tough.

    Plz, post CC, do not come here just to piss me off >:X

    "We've been together
    Since i can speak
    True love lasts forever
    Is it true, or you just fooled me?"

    "You have thee key to my heart
    And it surely controls me
    My heart is yours
    so don't crush it, you'll kill me."

    "Once in a while
    I look at the sky
    And find myself wondering
    If you left me and why."

    "Those who fear,
    Shall never see the light
    When love beomes real,
    Your world will fall apart."


    Yeh I know, fuckin Valentine Day fucked my head up,
    and I don't even have a girlfriend >_>

    CC will be apreciated
    Quote Originally Posted by Picto
    Quote Originally Posted by Louis :D
    Lmfao
    Have you ever seen the pictures of Picto XD
    Of course she has. She obviously thinks I'm adorable.
    Insanity is mah bro k?
    My Poems <3

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    Re: Poems >_>

    They were nice, but the beat to them seemed a bit off. Like one line would have 5 syllables (SP, lowut) but the next would have 8 or something. It just didn't sound quite right. I also couldn't tell if there was a rhyme scheme, or if it was one big poem. They were nice though.
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    Re: Poems >_>

    it made me laugh
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    Re: Poems >_>

    Cliche much?

    Make something a tad more original...
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    Re: Poems >_>

    Try doing some faggot, it's hard shit...
    Quote Originally Posted by Picto
    Quote Originally Posted by Louis :D
    Lmfao
    Have you ever seen the pictures of Picto XD
    Of course she has. She obviously thinks I'm adorable.
    Insanity is mah bro k?
    My Poems <3

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    Re: Poems >_>

    i didnt like them, i dont know they your first? they dont have enough feel, they lose track too easily, there ok, there just not the kind id read.
    Courtesy PLEASE
    I made an ani: http://darkdemon.org/viewtopic.php?f=61&t=56673

    u want my youtube? WELL HERE IT IS, MESSAGE ME NOW <3.
    http://www.youtube.com/user/dbs55denis



 

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