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    Long Ago

    Someone cry for me, just once.
    On today your sanity faded away
    And you felt the cold slap of life.
    Hold on to my hand as you take flight.
    I'll keep you grounded in fear.
    No reason to shed your tears.
    Just know that I am here.
    I'll give you care,
    While you give me a scare
    But I already know:
    You left me long ago.

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    Oh jeezus. I haven't been here in a while.
    Hay gaiz.
    Com/Crit Welcome. No flames or you'll get raped with a salad bar.
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    Re: Long Ago

    I didn't really get it till the end.
    It's pretty good.
    It has an alright rhyme scheme.
    (lol, I suck at CC)
    8.7/10
    Good stuff...
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