where did you write this? grammar is off in places, you mispelled a couple of words... i'm just stating this because word programs usually have some kind of spellchecker.

also it was pretty good, but i lol'd at 'For America!' also, it's the middle of a battle and he just got his legs blown off but he still correctly estimates they're 7 feet away? you should have just said 'some way away' or something

thing is though, you write it from a person who is in the battle, but he seems practically devoid of emotion throughout. other than that it was good, nice and solid.