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    Should this be in the master list?

    The Letter The sequel of "The box"

    The Box An articulate story about a man and his box.

    Old Man

    We see them cry well.
    Surely, the man proclaims I've.
    Buried her alive.

    He sits on the porch.
    Waiting for the day progress.
    When he see's her dress.

    He approaches calm.
    Invites her for the surprise.
    He plots her demise.

    They converse through night.
    As he invites her to bed.
    girl turns away, nothing said.

    Lunging forward now.
    He clenches the blouse smiling.
    you are mine, darling.

    He wants her to choke.
    He chuckles amongst himself,
    Ill have you myself.

    He grasps at her throat.
    Grasp the girl with all his might
    He smiles, the fright.

    He swings with a bat.
    Bones are broken, skin is bruised.
    This man is amused.

    So he drags her there.
    Towards the pre opened grave,
    'round She turns depraved.

    Shoveling soil,
    On top of the girl screaming.
    Eyes fade once gleaming.

    He feels accomplished.
    Old man is proud of his goal.
    She now in the hole.

    We see them cry well.
    Surely, the man proclaims I've.
    Buried her alive.


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    Re: Old Man Haiku (quite crude and sickly)

    im scared. how did you come up with this?
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    Re: Old Man Haiku (quite crude and sickly)

    Quote Originally Posted by Zelda
    im scared. how did you come up with this?
    past experience.
    >_>
    <_<
    i'm kidding!
    lol
    ahah.
    the purpose is to make you feel/be uncomfortable


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    Re: Old Man Haiku (quite crude and sickly)

    well, it worked.
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    Re: Old Man Haiku (quite crude and sickly)

    Sorry for bump but i have been away.
    and i have changed the haiku because it didnt follow the structure properely.
    please comment


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    Re: Old Man Haiku (quite crude and sickly)

    This Haiku gave me the feeling an old bearded man was sneaking up on me and was preparing to strip me and bury me alive.

    Seriously, though. If it actually scares people that means you're really good at writing. Good work.

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    Re: Old Man Haiku (quite crude and sickly)

    thank you.


    if anyone here is from australia and in year 9 atm
    then you would know that we did a naplan thing
    anyway

    my narrative about the box is gonna make people think i need counseling


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    Re: Should this be in the master list?

    well that scares me a bit. Good Job. The Haiku seems to work well. Pretty good... C:
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    Re: Should this be in the master list?

    Whoa...you remind me of my friend's poems.That's a good thing for this, :]
    Really good.
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    Re: Should this be in the master list?

    Wow really nice job. Fix your grammar though.
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