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    The Start of War

    This is a poem, but it isn't finished yet. Here it is:

    As I walk along, I look around,
    At the sky, the buildings, at the ground.
    I listen as well, what a peaceful sound,
    Happiness, fruitfulness, and grace resound.

    But wait, what is this? The peace disrupted,
    The sight of society corrupted.
    Something has got my walk interrupted,
    Machine guns blaring, war has erupted.

    Peace is no more, happiness gone away,
    I had a suspicion it wouldn't stay.
    Now, away from safety I start to stray,
    I join the battle, there's a game to play.

    But this enemy, it is not normal,
    When it attacked, its advance was not formal.
    Amidst all of the war, the turmoil,
    The enemy's approach was abnormal.

    Before each skirmish, I kneel down praying,
    About the distant future, kids playing.
    How Earth could change, peace forever staying,
    No war, no fights, no human betraying.

    But even now as I think, duty calls,
    It's time, no matter how much someone stalls.
    War is horrific, the blasting of walls,
    How another human, a soldier mauls.


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    Note: The name is subject to change, depending on what I add on.

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    Re: The Start of War

    Wow,dude you've got some talent
    Make MOAR MAKE MOAR!!!!


    No serious that was good...
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    Credz to [AC] for supah sig.
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    Re: The Start of War

    Quote Originally Posted by Toasty
    Wow,dude you've got some talent
    Make MOAR MAKE MOAR!!!!


    No serious that was good...
    Thanks. I haven't got the time to make more of it, caught up in school work and shit, but I will in my spare time that I'm not using to browse DD, play Soldier Front, etc.

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    Re: The Start of War

    It has a weird format, it's like AAAA BBBB CCCC DDDD EEEE FFFF. Try a Sestina or Limerick or Bull Durham Credo or something, those are fun to read.
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    Re: The Start of War

    Quote Originally Posted by Legos
    It has a weird format, it's like AAAA BBBB CCCC DDDD EEEE FFFF. Try a Sestina or Limerick or Bull Durham Credo or something, those are fun to read.
    I like it how it is, but I might try one of those.

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    Re: The Start of War

    I don't really like how it rhymes like AAAA BBBB CCCC like Legos said. I would use someting like ABAB BCBC CDCD. But that's just me.
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