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    Enthusiast Killa Z's Avatar
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    my first poem... DONT JUDGE ME!!!!!

    the great war.

    we won the battle but we lost our minds
    victory at its worst state, like being behind closed blinds.

    a man in a trench, freshly demised.
    life still peering from his stagnint eyes.
    this war is not great, it was all just a lie.

    fight to the end, there forces will bend.
    we will all live, but our wounds will never mend.
    this war is not great, but soon it will end.

    we won the war but we lost our minds.
    life no longer peering, from our wandering eyes.
    the trenches turned into a rocking chair, yet still we bear the wars endless tare.
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    Re: my first poem... DONT JUDGE ME!!!!!

    Read poetic books and u'll get better...
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    Re: my first poem... DONT JUDGE ME!!!!!

    It's okay for a start, but not all poems have to rhyme.
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    Re: my first poem... DONT JUDGE ME!!!!!

    wow, that makes sense.
    i like it.
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    Re: my first poem... DONT JUDGE ME!!!!!

    This is quite a good poem. And like who ever said this before me. Not all poems rhyme.
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    You want to know the difference.. between a weak burger, and a burger that has STRENGTH?
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