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    A dream come true

    Warning: Gore and blood.


    Lee opened the stainless steel door and walked out into the daylight. He squinted and pulled a pair of sunglasses from his pocket, and put them on. As Lee walked to his pale yellow Volkswagen Beetle, he said goodbye to his fellow co-workers who were also leaving. He got into his car and drove off.
    Lee noticed it was eerily quiet today. Nothing moved except the wind, and no other cars were on the road. Not even the 6 o'clock traffic. He had a peaceful ride home, listening to Three Days Grace the whole way home. He pulled into his driveway, got out of the car, and locked it. Lee unlocked the door and went inside. That was a big mistake.
    Blood flowed from the open door. Lee fell back and landed on his lawn. Shivering, he got up, and took a double-take on his house. Ghastly screams were coming from the top floor. Lee went in. Blood splatters, scratches, and holes in the walls were everywhere. Lee was shocked. "Come and play." A little girl's voice echoed from the the stairs. He could have sworn he saw a little girl, only 7, in a blue dress and black hair, holding a little teddy bear. "HELLO?" Lee screamed. Suddenly blood dropped onto the floor. He looked down, and noticed a familiar pattern. It was words. The blood said "Hello." Lee screamed and was grabbed by his coat. His head hit the stairs as they descended up the staircase. Lee noticed the trail of blood following his body from when he was being pulled up. Suddenly, he blacked out.
    Lee woke up to find himself in a room, filled with spider webs and blood. He was naked. He tried to get up, but something was forcing him down. Suddenly, the little girl appeared again. But instead of a teddy bear, she had a chainsaw. She smiled. Maggots fell out of her mouth, her lips curled back. The little girl's teeth were like a shark's, sharp and ready to kill. Her eyes were void of color. They were completely black. "So nice to see you." She said, her voice filled with venom on the last word. The chainsaw turned on. Lee tried to scream, but instead came a enormous amount of pain. The girl got closer, and put the chainsaw up to Lee's left leg. "You don't need this, do you?" She smiled again and brought the chainsaw down slowly into Lee's leg. Unbearable pain came. It felt like your legs were being broken over and over and over again. Then he went numb. His eyes were wide with fear. Lee started to struggle and cry. He couldn't get out. The little girl walked over, and touched Lee's forehead. Blood spurted and his forehead went numb too. Suddenly, he saw an image in his mind. He saw himself, his neck cut open and his head hanging by a thread. His head reattached and said in a mechanical voice "Forgive me for the cheesy line, but tonight is the night you dine in hell." He awoke and the little girl was sitting on his chest, a kitchen knife in hand. Lee realized what was about to happen.
    The little girl put the blade to his neck, slowly digging in. If you can imagine having your head cut off and make it 100 times more pain, this is the pain Lee felt. The little girl finally reached the back of his neck. He couldn't breath.
    Lee swung up. He was drenched in cold sweat. Lee was safe in his bed, sleeping with his wife. Amanda, his wife, got up and asked why he was shivering. Lee said "Bad dream." and put his head back on his pillow. He heard the little girl's voice again, coming from behind him. As he turned over, he said "What was that?" and the last thing he saw was the little girl, holding the kitchen knife.
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    Re: A dream come true

    That was fucking creepy, thumbs up for that ! I loved the description of the little girl, especially the maggots part. Some of it was kind of messy looking, and some of the descriptions were kind of lame and looked half-assed. Like how you described his neck being torn off, it didn't really pack much effect to me.

    On the other hand, it was creepy, gory, and amazing, some of it coming from the fact that it's 1:33 at night at the moment.

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    Re: A dream come true

    Actually it was somewhere around 3 in the morning and of course it was half assed I was tired as fuck.
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