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    Music (rap)

    Had to write something for school, decided to remake one of my favourite pieces that I've written. Intended to be rapped btw.

    A hill, and on it, a tree,
    Growing from the Earth like a shoot from a seed.
    This hill held a home like no other one,
    Quaint yet still housing a shitload of fun.
    In this home the beats shone - like the sun,
    and the drums echoed off the cliffs like the shot of a gun

    The guitar riffs were rhythmic,
    The lyrics were hypnotic,
    Like a drug they'll set you straight chronic.

    Around the hill the wolves howl and birds chirp to the beat,
    And in the town below the people get up and tap their feet.
    Running like wild dogs up and down the street.

    The music will never stop,
    The lyrics will always rock.
    Up on that hill where the music runs wild.


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    Re: Music (rap)

    Sorry, but I'm a rapper, and this sucked. Where's the flow, the multi-rhyming schme, punchlines, atmosphere, etc
    This is a poem, not rap. Your syllable count was WAY off.
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    Quote Originally Posted by Outpatient
    Sorry, but I'm a rapper, and this sucked. Where's the flow, the multi-rhyming schme, punchlines, atmosphere, etc
    This is a poem, not rap. Your syllable count was WAY off.
    lol he is a rapper u no!
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    Re: Music (rap)

    Quote Originally Posted by Crono
    Quote Originally Posted by Outpatient
    Sorry, but I'm a rapper, and this sucked. Where's the flow, the multi-rhyming schme, punchlines, atmosphere, etc
    This is a poem, not rap. Your syllable count was WAY off.
    lol he is a rapper u no!
    Which generally gives me a better insight into writing a rap then say, you, for example.
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    Re: Music (rap)

    naw man I'm a rapper
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    Re: Music (rap)

    LMAO!!!
    Pretty nice,Liam.I can't say much since I'm not a rapper.
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    Re: Music (rap)

    Quote Originally Posted by Outpatient
    Sorry, but I'm a rapper, and this sucked. Where's the flow, the multi-rhyming schme, punchlines, atmosphere, etc
    This is a poem, not rap. Your syllable count was WAY off.
    I don't believe you're a rapper. No rapper has the intelligence to use something as complicated as the internet. I think you're just a nerd posing as a rapper because I'm sure you're a nerd because you're talking about poems. You nerd.

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    ^ I think you're right. I'm starting to think he's not a rapper at all.
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    Re: Music (rap)

    And what the fuck is that smell? Oh, it's the stench of failure.

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    Re: Music (rap)

    Quote Originally Posted by Dinotoast
    LMAO!!!
    Pretty nice,Liam.I can't say much since I'm not a rapper.
    yeah u should probably get more experience rappin before you comment on a rap buddy!!11!!
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