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Sorry I was just being called stuoid so I took it down
Last edited by blasife; 17 Mar 2014 at 04:52 AM.
Finally! I waited ages for your new book and I am not disappointed with this excerpt.
Now, where can I buy it?
Originally Posted by blasife
(the grammar test)
Thanks for the feedback and hey no need to be a jerk I am just trying to have fun and hey don't talk bad bout every one's stuff ya you can point out faults but also point out a good thing to I mean all you are doing is discouriging people
Last edited by blasife; 05 Jan 2014 at 04:38 AM.
Reason: more words
keep at it
Yeah man blasife, keep doing your business. If you have fun, nothing else matters really. I liked it.
Originally Posted by Axon
Just try and edit your work. Go through and fix the spelling and grammar, I mean, Microsoft Word literally tells you when you've made a mistake.
I'm going to be completely honest I read this: "300 children sat in a adutorium" and stopped reading.
Sometimes you need people to be a dick to you in order for you to realise the mistakes you are making, and because I'm so #edgy, I'll be the one to say it.
You really need to fix everything. Here's an idea: Read a book. Something like, Catcher in the Rye, or To Kill A Mockingbird, grasp the fundamentalist novel / novella conventions, and use them in your work.
I think he may need to read something easier than those books. They're good books as well, but they're so boring. I'm not saying that they're bad, but they take so long to pick up in pace. To Kill a Mockingbird takes 100 pages to finally get to the actual story. Sure, the meaning behind these books is great and I admire what they've done but books should be enjoyable to read as well. I think he'd have a hard time getting through these books. I'd recommend reading anything that takes your interest blasife and goes up to around 100 pages max. Nothing too demanding and something you can really enjoy reading.
Originally Posted by Stark
I don't mean to put your suggestion down Stark. I think you've offered some good advice. blasife would totally benefit from reading something just as long as it isn't demanding. Once he's read quite a few books then he can move onto the more advanced stuff.
Just keep doing what you're doing blasife. You're writing and you might have a long way to go in terms of spelling, grammar and punctuation but... you're writing. And not many people write these days. So keep at it and keep having fun with it too.
I hate people who think you have to mention something good too when you criticize something, sounds so stupid to point how bad it is and then say it's not that bad.
The spelling mistakes makes the story unreadable, in the sense that I can't take it seriously.
29 Jan 2014, 10:09 AM
If I just point out everything negative, and nothing of what the person did right, then they don't think they did anything well. It doesn't exactly motivate them to improve if they think everything they've done is bad. I know you think I'm saying it's bad but then saying it isn't bad. That does sound stupid, but it's not how I offer critique. I point out what worked and what didn't, which is different.
Originally Posted by MCToast