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Thread: My song

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    My song

    Hey i just wrote a song for my band, its like a sad love song, its about a girl i knew that moved away, and i really liked her so it sucked, so anyway, heres the song

    [Verse 1]
    I used to know this girl with the most beautiful hair,
    She went through life as if she didn't seem to care
    Now she's left i wish that she had stayed,
    But now shes gone, gone far far away.

    [Chorus]
    She's the Girl for me,
    but she's been set free,
    and i couldn't believe,
    that she had to leave,
    and it tore me wide open...

    [Verse 2]
    Whenever i saw you it made me feel good inside
    you should know that when you left, i cried,
    sometimes i thought that we could be more than friends,
    but i always knew that it would have to end.

    [Chorus]
    She's the Girl for me,
    but she's been set free,
    and i couldn't believe,
    that she had to leave,
    and it tore me wide open...

    [Verse 3]
    Sometimes it felt like it was too much,
    there was always someone who had a crush,
    you were the one that had all the looks,
    and i was the one that didnt have what it took.

    [Chorus/Ending]
    She's the Girl for me,
    but she's been set free,
    and i couldn't believe,
    that she had to leave,
    it tore me wide open
    But i got sealed shut...

    im not good with chorus', and placing them, so i just put it after each verse

    tell me what u think, and please dont say, oh its a shit emo song cause i dont care

    E:btw i dont know if its done, it depends on whether people think it should be longer
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    Re: My song

    Meh
    I don't know what the melody sounds like, but the way I quickly look at it, it sounds like a poem more than a song. The melody would be off the way I look at it :l
    NOW GET RID OF THAT FUCKING UGLY THREE DAYS GRACE SIGNATURE, FUCKING GOD!
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    Re: My song

    lol i can safely say ive never heard a song by 3 days grace, ive heard of them...

    He is klayton, from a band called celldweller, which if you ever heard any of their stuff, you would be surprised, as it isnt emo/sad/punk music

    anyway, poems and songs are really the same, i dont actually have a melody for it yet, but when i do, i'll get a video up, of maybe just me doing it acousticly, or maybe my band doing it.
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    Re: My song

    Nono, that's the singer from Three Days Grace.
    NOW GET THAT DISGRACE OUT OF MY FACE.
    Really, the signature is atrocious.
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    lol f' off hes not the singer from 3 days grace, hes from a band called celldweller lol
    now stop spamming and back to topic
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    Re: My song

    .va:
    =/=

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    Re: My song

    Lol owned.

    Anyway, those lyrics kind of sucked. Sorry, but honestly. "Whenever I saw you it made me feel good inside"? I personally wouldn't sing that if I was the singer for a band. Same with a lot of the other lyrics, think about how awkward they'd be to actually sing out loud.
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    thats exactly why im not the singer lol, meh im not really good at coming up with lyrics
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